HBS Essay 3: Growth-Oriented Essay (250 words)
設問
"What more would you like to share with the MBA Admissions Board?"
アウトラインの選択肢
Option A: Personal Why の深掘り
- 父・身近な人物の影響
- 産業 DX への問題意識
- HBS で学ぶ動機の personal narrative
Option B: Future Vision の具体化
- 卒業後 10年の絵
- なぜ自分がそれを成し遂げる人物か
- HBS 経験がどう繋がるか
Option C: 隠れた強み・経験
- レジュメ・他のエッセイで触れていない側面
- 趣味・コミュニティ活動・読書
- 人間性のバランス
推奨: Option A or B(このプロファイルでは Personal Why が最強)
草案
[Hook]:
My father spent thirty years building manufacturing automation systems
for a mid-sized industrial firm in Saitama. When his company was
acquired by a larger conglomerate in 2017, the integration team's
first move was to scrap the proprietary software his team had
developed over decades—software that, despite its idiosyncrasies,
had shaped how operators thought about their work.
[Body]:
I was twenty-one then, finishing my economics degree, watching from
the outside. The lesson I drew that year was not about software or
acquisitions. It was about the gap between technological progress
and the human systems that have to adapt to it. Japanese industry
holds enormous reservoirs of operational knowledge—much of it tacit,
embedded in code, processes, and habits—and the question of how to
upgrade it without erasing it has shaped my career choices ever since.
[Connection]:
Choosing Tokai Tokyo Securities meant studying capital allocation in
this context. Choosing software engineering at MonotaRO meant getting
my hands on the actual systems. Choosing HBS now means learning to
operate at the level where these decisions about industrial DX are
made—not in code or in spreadsheets, but in boardrooms.
[Conclusion]:
This is the perspective I want to bring to my section, my Field team,
and the broader HBS community.
Word Count: ~245
推敲メモ
強み
- Personal narrative(父の話)
- 抽象化された問題意識(産業 DX)
- キャリア選択の一貫性
注意点
- 父の話が事実かどうか(要確認)→ もし違うなら別の身近な人物に
- Personal Why は誇張せず、本物のエピソードを使う
注意: 草案の「父」のエピソードは仮想です。本人の真実のストーリーに置き換えてください。
もし類似の体験がない場合は、別の Defining Moment を探す必要があります。
Personal Why 候補(要本人選定)
候補 1: 家族の体験
- 父・母・兄弟の specific な経験
- それが自分のキャリア選択にどう影響したか
候補 2: 学生時代の経験
- 経済学部の特定講義
- 社会的事件への反応
- アルバイト・部活の経験
候補 3: 職場での Defining Moment
- 仕組債販売の特定エピソード
- 顧客との特定の対話
- エンジニア転職の決断瞬間
候補 4: コロナ・社会的変化
- 2020年マーケット混乱の体験
- DX の加速を実感した瞬間
選定基準: 「自分にしか書けない・他人が書けない」エピソードを優先
添削履歴
| Version | Date | 修正内容 | コメント |
|---|---|---|---|
| v1 | YYYY-MM-DD | 初稿(仮想 Personal Why) | 本物のストーリーに置き換え必要 |